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Chapter 5: The Outland - Organizations & Kingdom of Jove

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Greetings,

The content for Organizations (page 70 to 77) and the Kingdom of Jove (page 98 to 105) is complete. Please review those pages and report any typos or comments in this thread. I particularly need feedback on the level and layout of the content for the Kingdom of Jove. This will serve as the "template" for the other planetary systems.

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The two societies have been at odds, and at times each others throats, across an eon of time and space.

The two societies have been at odds, and at times each other's throats, across an eon of time and space.


   
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It is little wonder, the audacious endeavor by the corsair Prince Kaulder Djinn known as the Callisto Affair in 646, and the Battle of Himalia that followed, eventually provoked open war.

It is little wonder that the audacious endeavor by the corsair Prince Kaulder Djinn in 646, known as the Callisto Affair, and the Battle of Himalia that followed, eventually provoked open war.


   
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While there is an Assembly on each of the four main moons, the Grand Assembly is hosted by the king responsible for the defense the Jovian worlds, currently Anaxilus IX, King of Ganymede.

While there is an Assembly on each of the four main moons, the Grand Assembly is hosted by the king responsible for the defense of the Jovian worlds, currently Anaxilus IX, King of Ganymede.


   
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The Jovian navy is comprised on two battle groups.

The Jovian navy is comprised of two battle groups.


   
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Commanded by a captain, a company consists of eight phalanx or 128 troopers.

Commanded by a captain, a company consists of eight phalanx of 128 troopers.


   
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The king’s personal guard consist of a phalanx of captains in heavy armor equipped with advanced rocket packs.

The king’s personal guard consists of a phalanx of captains in heavy armor equipped with advanced rocket packs.


   
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Government: Kingdom of Jove; a military governor appointed by the Grand Assembly to a ten year term.

Government: Kingdom of Jove; a military governor appointed by the Grand Assembly to a ten-year term.


   
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During the Orbital War, the newly formed Martian Republic assumed control and began genetically engineering their work force to maintain productivity by reducing the negative effects of Jupiter’s massive gravity.

During the Orbital War, the newly formed Martian Republic assumed control and began genetically engineering their workforce to maintain productivity by reducing the negative effects of Jupiter’s massive gravity.


   
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While the platforms have been upgraded with grav-flux generators to normalize the gravity at 1g to accommodate the work force, the conditions are poor and the work dangerous resulting in a significant rate of injury and death.

While the platforms have been upgraded with grav-flux generators to normalize the gravity at 1g to accommodate the workforce, the conditions are poor and the work dangerous resulting in a significant rate of injury and death.


   
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Government: Kingdom of Jove; a military governor appointed by the Grand Assembly to a ten year term.

Government: Kingdom of Jove; a military governor appointed by the Grand Assembly to a ten-year term.


   
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Trade: Magma-driven geothermal plants produce an abundance of power exported in energy cells; the Thashtar and Preometheus Forge both produce heavy industrial machinery from imported raw materials; primary imports include: food, helium-3, hydrogen, raw materials, technology, and water.

Trade: Magma-driven geothermal plants produce an abundance of power exported in energy cells; the Thashtar and Prometheus Forge both produce heavy industrial machinery from imported raw materials; primary imports include: food, helium-3, hydrogen, raw materials, technology, and water.

* Is it 'Thashtar' or 'Tvashtar'? I see it spelled both ways.  May I suggest 'Thrashtar'?

 


   
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Prometheus Forge is massive industrial complex dominated by a power plant and the governor’s fortress.

Prometheus Forge is a massive industrial complex dominated by a power plant and the governor’s fortress.


   
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Prometheus Forge is the capital of Io, primary spaceport, and anchors the industrial triangle along with the Volund and Tvashtar forges; sixty percent of the Ioninan population lives in the triangle.

Prometheus Forge is the capital of Io, primary spaceport, and anchors the industrial triangle along with the Volund and Tvashtar forges; sixty percent of the Ionian population lives in the triangle.

* Is it 'Thashtar' or 'Tvashtar'? I see it spelled both ways. May I suggest 'Thrashtar'?


   
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The city broods atop a huge floating platform over 10-kilomters in diameter.

The city broods atop a huge floating platform over 10-kilometers in diameter.


   
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